The purified essence of moving
energy is like an eagle flying.
Or a monkey limping:
Hanuman seeking herbs on the mountain
failed
so brought the whole mountain.
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Every word on the page
is pain
coming or going
seeking or striking
each brings its own blood type
running down the paper.
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Hanuman’s foot bled from an arrow strike
so he held the mountain, and flew.
For Björn’s FormForAll, Meeting the Bar on dVerse. Alright, so I used variations on an already varied form: two sestets and a couplet where the volta summarizes the theme of the poem. The style is very much influenced by Michael McClure, especially his Antechamber & Other Poems.
Jedediah Smith 
Amazing:
‘Every word on the page
is pain
coming or going
seeking or striking
each brings its own blood type
running down the paper’.
Thank you
What a wonderful concept, and how you have used the mythology to bring it together… love it.
Thanks
I really loved it. “The purified essence of moving
energy is like an eagle flying.” this description was mesmerisingly beautiful.
Thank you but…the first two lines are the “Beginning with Lines by Milarepa” part – Milarepa being the great poet of Tibet. I used those lines to launch the monkey/problem of the sonnet linking Hanuman’s troubles to the difficulties we all have with creativity at times.
aha…they are still beautiful and I should have done the research.
No, no, my responsibility – I’m just not sure how to annotate it. Seems distracting to put it in quotation marks.
I also liked that every word was pain coming or going and at times this is why we write, the pain we see or hear, the injustice, our lives punctuated by brief moments of happiness. Your words added much to the beautiful first bit.
A creative approach to the sonnet challenge ~ I specially like the ending lines ~
Thank you
I like the images you connected with energy and enthusiasm.
Thank you so much.
Interesting beginning with the words of Milarepa. I like where you took it then. Well crafted.
Many thanks.
Lots of thought here, a very bold & creative take own the prompt–constructing new parameters, striking out from mythology, and alighting in existentialism. Read it thrice, really dug the audacity.
Thank you – your observations are encouraging.
I agree with Kim… terrific stanza
Thanks
Oh, I agree completely how original and forceful this is. You hit the nail on the head when it comes to philosophizing with mythology.
Thank you so much
Hanuman’s perseverance must be inspiring to all poets. The triumph of the limping monkey!
I do like your take on this prompt, especially the mythology. excellent.
Thank you
I am a sucker for mythology worked into poetry and I liked yours very much.
Me too. I graze pretty widely in my reading of world myths.
As do I. It is good stuff.
I love Milarepa, and love your sonnet too.
Thank you